The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
This
line graph illustrates the amount of
crime
in Manchester city centre,
compares
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and compares
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Bulgary
, Car Theft, and Robbery between 2003 to 2012.
According to
the graph, it can be seen that
Bulgary
crime
was reported the most between 2003 to 2006,
then
the Car Theft is most likely to happen after 2007.
Moreover
, the city seems not to encounter the
crime
from robbery much. In 2003, the
Bulgary
was roughly around 3,400,
then
hit
peak
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at approximately 3,750 in 2004. Afterwards, it
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dramatically to nearly 1,100 in 2008. A significantly increased to 1,500 in 2009 and remained
stealer
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at 1400
in
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the end of 2012.
On the other hand
, the robbery
crime
began at only 600. It slightly jumped to 900 and
decline
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to 500 between 2005 and 2008,
then
fluctuated and hit the same amount in 2012.
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,
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the car theft started the period at 2300. Until 2006, it surpassed the
Bulgary
crime
and rose significantly to 2800 in 2012.
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