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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table gives data and previsions about differences in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of people aged over 65. The analysis is taken on three different nations, that are Canada, Germany and the UK. Data are split
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 three specific years: 1988, 2000 and 2030.
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, we can see that the country with more
habitants
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inhabitants
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 with an age over 65 is Germany, for every year taken
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 consideration. Following, we can find Canada, that faces a significant increase throughout the years.
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third,
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we find the UK,
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 presents an enormous percentage increase for the predicted year.
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, none of these three countries, experience a decline
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 people aged 65 or more. More detailed, it can be noticed that Germany experiences a constant growth in number of population aged over 65, growing about 5% in each year analysed.
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, the UK saw a
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 rise between 1988 and 2000, compared to Canada
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 over
65’
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65
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 population
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 by around 4%.

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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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