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The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table data below shows the top ten Internet users by country in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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A glance at the table provides the top ten
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users
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 by country and the percentage of
population
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the population
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 in 2016.
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, the vast majority of British people were
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ursers
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users
 whilst the percentage of
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users
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 in India was the least.
According to
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 the information shown in the table,
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 China was the top
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country which had the most
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users
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721434547 people, the
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 were only 52.3% of the total Chinese population which was the most among the ten areas in 2016.
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, there were 92.6% of British people used the
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 which was the highest proportion in the ten countries
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 the U.K. was the top 9 country.
On the other hand
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, even though there were only 34.8% of Indians used the
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 ,the figure for its
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 was 7 times more than that for English
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.What should be particularly mentioned is that there were 91.1%
Japanese
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used the
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 which was only 1.5% lower than
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the British
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users
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’ percentage.
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