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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart provides information about how many
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 (in billions) people spent on different types of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002.
It is clear that
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 the majority opted for local call types,
while
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 national and international calls were the second most popular in the UK.
Moreover
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, both belonged to fixed lines.
In contrast
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, mobile calls had the lowest numbers during the given period. Looking at the information in detail, British people spent 70
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minutes
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 on local calls in 1995.
This
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 number
then
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 slightly increased and peaked at 90
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minutes
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 in 1999. Afterwards, there was a gradual decline to approximately 72
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minutes
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 in 2002.
On the other hand
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, the duration of national and international calls started at nearly 38
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minutes
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 in 1995 and increased steadily to just over 60
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minutes
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 by 2001. In terms of mobile call usage, it remained at a low level, below 10
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minutes
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, from 1995 to 1998, before beginning to rise. Compared to 1995, the figures for mobile calls grew almost tenfold by 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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