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Many parents these days choose to send their children studying abroad. What are the causes? Is it a positive or negative development?

#parents #children #development
Nowdays
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, more and more
students
 are sent to
study
 abroad by their parents. Some people treat that as a positive trend,
while
 others don't. In my view, there are several understandable reasons why parents want that for their children to
study
in
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 a
foreigh
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foreign
 university or college. On the one hand, the advantages of studying abroad can help
students
 to
broadens
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 their
mind
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minds
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. It can help them to develop new
thoughs
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thoughts
thought
 about how they can think about things and they can be open minds. Most important is that
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it hepls
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hepls
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helps
students
 become independent without their parents. That
approves
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encourages
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 them to learn how to live by
yourself
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themselves
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 without help to learn how to cope in difficult situations. It
also
 helps
students
 to become familiar with another culture. They have the opportunity to see the world differently than they have learned
so
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. It helps them to see things from a different angle.
On the other hand
, there are
also
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disadvantages to
study
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 abroad. First of all, the extra cost they have to deal with, because
its
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it's
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 far more expensive to
study
 in a
foreing
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foreign
 country.
Its
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also
 difficult to
abjust
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adjust
 to a new lifestyle so the
students
 get homesick because of that. Until
the
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they
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found
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find
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 other
students
 to help them or new friends
that
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they are in the same situation, they are alone.
However
, if
students
wants
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 to learn in
a new situations
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new situations
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 they have to try to
study
 abroad, even if
its
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 difficult at
the
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first time.
This
 is how you can
became
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more
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a more
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 strong and
indepentend
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independent
 person.
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