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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent (widespread) and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#convenience #foods #methods #preparation
last
 few years ago convenient food was prepared for
people
.Nowadays
this
 thing is growing among
people
.
People
 take a lot of time to prepare at home so they
buythey
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buy they
 eat more food. Some foods can make you fat.even if a person eats fast it will lead to excess weight and cause him to get sick quickly. A person should exercise quickly to be healthy.
People
 switch to
easy to cook
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easy-to-cook
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 meals for themselves. In
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conclusion
conclucion
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conclusion
, a person should eat right and exercise
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