The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the passage of time and the improvement of technology and science, the average life span and

overall

well-being have been on a steady growth,

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resulted in many becoming too comfortable and lazy. Which

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has a negative impact on them. Throughout history, humanity has faced numerous pandemics and illnesses. Not only that

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famines caused by war or lack of properly prepared sanitized food. It is an understatement to say we've progressed, rather many of the said problems have been completely wiped out or non-existent now. With mass production of nutritious supplies of food, pharmaceutical products and well-accessed healthcare have become a norm.

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sports facilities and other forms of exercise are well-founded in all societies.

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because of vaccine shots. Yet, with a number of issues solved, there are still many battling with newly risen matters,

such

as obesity or drug usage. Ironically their root are the same as the solved topics mentioned before. An overweighted individual has easy access to mass amounts of food which do not require a lot of physical activity to reach. Same with an addicted person, with modern science inventing all sorts of chemicals for them to use.These instances have sparked debates and arguments about what should be done to battle them.

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introduced as a pain killer. In my humble point of view, as human beings, it is a personal decision whether to seek a healthier lifestyle or neglect them, no matter how much our modern equipment evolves for the better, it is ultimately their choice.

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Be sure to have a clearer introduction that directly addresses the prompt, offering a concise thesis statement about your position.

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Develop a conclusion that summarizes your arguments and reiterates your stance, providing a strong closure to your essay.

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To enhance coherence, use a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas between and within paragraphs.

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Focus on exploring each main point in separate paragraphs, ensuring that each has a clear topic sentence and comprehensive support.

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You've provided relevant examples from history and modern times, such as the eradication of certain diseases and current health issues, which strengthen your argument.

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Your essay presents a balanced view by discussing both the advancements in healthcare and the new challenges faced today, effectively addressing the prompt.

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You demonstrated good logical structure by organizing your essay into paragraphs, each discussing a distinct aspect of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

1. Standard of health
2. Average
3. Lower
4. Future
5. Aging population
6. Chronic diseases
7. Sedentary lifestyle
8. Lack of exercise
9. Poor dietary habits
10. Environmental pollution
11. Technological advancements
12. Impact on health

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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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