It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo...) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Regardless of the era, animal species

frequenlty

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frequently

suffer from extinction, and

humans

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beings are not the exception. Some believe that they need to prepare or prevent to happen

this

thread. I personally argue that they do not need so much preparation for that.

Firstly

acient

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ancient

species,

such

dinosaur

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dinosaurs

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, had extincted more than ten thousand years before mainly because of their ability to adapt to

enviornments

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environments

. They had no knowledge to create something to prevent extremely cold or hot situations since they easily

became

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die when natural disasters

happpened

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eruption

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However

people

can not only construct

shelter

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a shelter

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for

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this

disaster but

also

predict what will happen in the

nearly

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future.

Thus

, the probability of extinction is reduced and they hardly diminish in the world, and I completely agree with

this

On the other hand

, since predicting the future is super difficult,

people

may not be able to know that a disaster the

earch

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earth

has never experienced

occur

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occurred

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, which leads

people

extinct

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extinction

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For instance

, the biggest earthquake in Japanese history caused

to create

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a giant tsunami, which

make

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caused

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more than five

thousands

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thousand

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apply

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civilians

die

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to die

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. Though they prepared

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for to

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tsunami by building huge walls around beaches, the

thunami

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tsunami

came over the walls and crushed numerous houses and

ficilities

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facilities

Thus

, the power of prediction by

people

is not enough at

this

moment since they need to improve it. In conclusion,

while

there

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the certain

reason

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reasons

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why

humans

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human

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beings have to prepare

extinction

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for extinction

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, the proportion is not too huge for them because of their knowledge and technology.

Thus

, they should not spend too much time

for

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this

prevention.

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