It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo...) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Regardless of the era, animal species
frequenlty
suffer from extinction, and Correct your spelling
frequently
humans
beings are not the exception. Some believe that they need to prepare or prevent to happen Change the noun form
human
this
thread. I personally argue that they do not need so much preparation for that.
Firstly
, acient
species, Correct your spelling
ancient
such
as dinosaur
, had extincted more than ten thousand years before mainly because of their ability to adapt to Fix the agreement mistake
dinosaurs
enviornments
. They had no knowledge to create something to prevent extremely cold or hot situations since they easily Correct your spelling
environments
became
die when natural disasters Verb problem
apply
happpened
like Verb problem
apply
eruption
. Fix the agreement mistake
eruptions
However
, people
can not only construct shelter
Add an article
a shelter
to
Change preposition
for
this
disaster but also
predict what will happen in the nearly
future. Change the word
near
Thus
, the probability of extinction is reduced and they hardly diminish in the world, and I completely agree with this
.
On the other hand
, since predicting the future is super difficult, people
may not be able to know that a disaster the earch
has never experienced Correct your spelling
earth
search
occur
, which leads Wrong verb form
occurred
people
to extinct
. Replace the word
extinction
For instance
, the biggest earthquake in Japanese history caused to create
a giant tsunami, which Verb problem
apply
make
more than five Verb problem
caused
thousands
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thousand
of
civilians Change preposition
apply
die
. Though they prepared Fix the infinitive
to die
to
tsunami by building huge walls around beaches, the Change preposition
for to
thunami
came over the walls and crushed numerous houses and Correct your spelling
tsunami
ficilities
. Correct your spelling
facilities
Thus
, the power of prediction by people
is not enough at this
moment since they need to improve it.
In conclusion, while
there is
the certain Verb problem
apply
reason
why Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
humans
beings have to prepare Change the noun form
human
extinction
, the proportion is not too huge for them because of their knowledge and technology. Change preposition
for extinction
Thus
, they should not spend too much time for
Change preposition
on
this
prevention.Submitted by ryoga17.0325 on
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