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The maps show Southside , a shopping mall as it is now , and plans for its development. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revealent .

The maps show Southside , a shopping mall as it is now , and plans for its development. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revealent .
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The figures illustrate the changes that will take place in the Southside
area
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 including the shopping mall, golf course, car
park
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 and gym.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 some facilities will be demolished and replaced by both a car
park
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 and shipping centre which will be expanded to the right-hand side of the
area
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. Looking at the shopping mall plan, There will be a separation between a department store and a shopping
area
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. A supermarket and a toilet will remain at the same place
while
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 a cafe will be repurposed into an info centre. A play
area
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, a noodle shop and cinemas will vanish and the new beauty salon, two shoe stores, cosmetics store and gift shop will be erected
instead
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.
Moreover
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, Three blocks of fashion stores spring up to the right of the toilet. The golf course , stand-alone fitness and a
park
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 are going to be flattened and the car
park
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 will be extended as same as the shopping centre to the end of the
area
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.
Additionally
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, The department store from the mall will be relocated to the old golf course and
park
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 with the new entrance to the building itself.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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