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Some people think that living in a country is essential to learn that country’s language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 that the most effective way to learn
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culture is to spend time in the country of its'
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, spelling,
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 habits would enlarge chances for
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achieving
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 goal. In my opinion, there is no better way than acknowledging through the practice.
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 with, as foreigners, we are likely to experience a cultural shock. Every drastic difference, we are surrounded by,
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encourage
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 our brain cells to work harder.
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, going out of the comfort zone helps to gain
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competences
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.
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, we can bring the conclusion from observing kids. Regardless
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 they come from, they are able to get basic
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 of any
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 they hear.
This
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 period of time abroad.
On the other hand
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, not everyone has an option to deal with nationals meanwhile they study their culture.
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,
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 not the biggest factor that
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progress. The pivotal role in
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 repetition.
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, we can book classes with native speakers that would give us exactly the same insights and knowledge online. If we practice enough, the outcome will be
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comparable
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, people argue that the significant part of gaining
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 the culture is to experience it in
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real life. In my opinion, perhaps it is one of
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 ways.
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, it is not
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 itself that makes it so effective, but spending time with natives makes the biggest change.

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Lexical Resource
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Spelling and Punctuation
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Addressing the Task
Your essay effectively engages with the prompt, offering a balanced viewpoint on the importance of living in a country to learn its language and culture.
Structural Coherence
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Use of Examples
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • acquisition
  • nuances
  • idiomatic expressions
  • context
  • global connectivity
  • cultural programs
  • media consumption
  • firsthand experience
  • frequent opportunities
  • substantial understanding
  • cultural shock
  • alternative methods
  • viable options
  • natural interaction
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