Although many people value public parks, this space could be better used for the other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and build economics. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Most

pepole

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people

appreciate

city

parks

and

pulic

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public

gardens. Yet

due to

the

inrease

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increase

increased

growth of the

population

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population,

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some think

this

can be utilized as accommodational buildings or in the development of

busnisess

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business

and economy. in my opinion, I

belive

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believe

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that public

parks

are

essential

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an essential

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part of

community

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the community

a community

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.

While

many people presume that it is better to have residential

apartments

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apartment

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buildings in

place

of public

parks

this

might have

bad

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a bad

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influence on preexisting residents’ well-being, as these

parks

are considered the only

place

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places

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where greenery

to absorb

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carbon dioxide and

converting

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converts

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it to oxygen,

for example

, cities like New York where resident have small flats with no back

yards

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a

place

of greenery like

central

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a central

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park that provides

a

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apply

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fresh oxygen to all of the

city

residents.

Furthermore

,

parks

provided

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provide

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tremendous benefits for all

its

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their

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visitors playgrounds are an excellent

place

in improving

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to improve

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children’s immunity

where

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and where

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children

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children's

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social life might potentially progress

such

as play dates,

adults

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and adults

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using walking and cycling

path

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paths

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allowing people to do exercises.

In

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the other hand, housing issues can be solved by simply constructing residential buildings in the suburbs and outskirts of the

city

allowing more employment chances for construction workers and for the

real-estate

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real estate

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market to flourish.

for instance

, the development of Manhattan

city

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and its increase in size by width

instead

of the very crowded

city

limited by limited space. In conclusion, I believe that the development of a

city

should not be by destroying a public park, other solutions could be more

favorable

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favourable

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providing a better outcome for new and old residents by using the outskirts of the

city

.