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You have been busy with your studies for the past month and haven't had time to visit your family. Write a letter to your grandmother. In your letter: Apologize for not getting in touch with her sooner Explain why you have been so busy Arrange a time to visit Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Grandmother, I am writing
this
 letter to say hello, how are you doing ? I hope you are doing well. Since I was very busy with my studies
in
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this
 past
month
 and I could not visit you,
but
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I hope
this
month
. I will get to see you soon. I'
m
 really sorry for not informing you that I will not be able to visit you for a
month
. I was very busy
about
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 my study and you know.
This
 year is my final year before
I'
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I graduate
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m
 graduating, but don't worry grandmother.
After
this
month
 I will get a break before I
returned
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return
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 for labs semester. I will be visiting you on 14th April with my family, because it is
water
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a water
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 festival. I will be at your home around 11:00 A.
M
.
get
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 ready and
waiting
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wait
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 for me. I'
m
 coming and
last
 but not
lease
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least
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. I would like you to make me
a donuts
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a donut
donuts
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. Can't wait to see you and eat the delicious
donuts
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doughnuts
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 from you. See you soon, Fon Preawpiroon
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Structure
Ensure your letter follows a clear, logical structure. Organize ideas into separate paragraphs to improve clarity.
Cohesion
For further improvements, focus on varying your sentence structures to enhance the flow of ideas.
Content
Apologies could be more explicit, and reasons for busyness can be elaborated more to enrich the content and emotional depth.
Tone
Friendly and personal tone suitable for writing to a family member.
Engagement
Effective use of direct questions to engage the reader and personalize the letter.
Closing
The closing part of the letter creates a cheerful anticipation of the visit.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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