Nowadays, it seems that different generations within the family spend less time doing activities together. Why is that? Is this a positive or negative development?
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. I thinkUse synonyms
,
that condition happens because there is an individual difference regarding personal preferences to spend their Remove the comma
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time
, and Use synonyms
therefore
, should be seen as a negative development since can decrease closeness among each family member.
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have
different preferences to spend their Change the verb form
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. Consider a Use synonyms
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have
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that is
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in
a group activity since they already enjoy Change preposition
to
to do
their own things or Change the verb form
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develop
their own habits.
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involve
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involved
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members
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and
can weaken their level of intimacy Correct word choice
which
among
each other. Change preposition
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millennials
generations
prefer to spend their free Use synonyms
time
to play with mobile games rather than Use synonyms
hang
out with their relatives, resulting in the difficulty Wrong verb form
hanging
to blend
themselves with other Change preposition
of blending
members
if they have to engage in several occasions.
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generations
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are having
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time
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in
present times because they already possess different interests Change preposition
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can lower the level of closeness among them.Correct pronoun usage
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Linking words are very important in your essay.
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- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite