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Some people believe that teaching children at home is the best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #home #child’s #development #school
It is
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argued
 that homeschooling is better than
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typical
 learning at
scholl
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school
, for students
mature
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,
while
 others think
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the opposite
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. Despite,
loneliness
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the loneliness
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, from private classes, there are
benifits
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benefits
 as better marks, and
flexible
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a flexible
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schedulle
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schedule
 that overweight the drawbacks. Studying alone with
teacher
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a teacher
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,
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apply
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 makes the process of getting new knowledge, a bit dull. When a pupil,
do
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 a class task
,
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 or talk about the theme,
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or paragrapgh
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paragrapgh
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paragraph
paragraphs
, it comes to
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apply
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being limited, to their
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minds
,
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and
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 the opportunity to hear and listen for
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the outstanding
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idea
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.
On the other hand
, taking
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the professors
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professors
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professors'
professor's
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whole
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the whole
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attetion
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attention
 is beneficial. As,
adolscents
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adolescents
 can ask questions, redo tasks
untill
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until
 they understand the theme.
What
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, in turn,
not
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 possible
in
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many times, because a lesson in
Kazahstan
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Kazakhstan
 lasts 45 minutes, and there are other 26 people to work with.
Also
,
beside
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besides
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learnig
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learning
, some have extra classes, and having
own
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their own
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schedulle
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schedule
 is beneficial. A boy or girl, do
own
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your own
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 graph for a week, and do not miss interesting meetings and extra lessons, as students at
scholl
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school
, who can have classes only in deep evening or
weekends
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at weekends
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.
Thus
, to
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conclude
,
it
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apply
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students
styding
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studying
styling
standing
 alone have
own
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their own
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schedule
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schedules
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 and better marks, even rarely could feel loneliness.
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language clarity
Consider using clear and precise language to express your views, as this will strengthen your argument and make it easier for the reader to follow.
examples and details
Include specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points. This helps to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.
essay structure
Work on structuring your essay with a more coherent flow, making sure that your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are distinct and logically organized.
spelling and grammar
Try to pay attention to spelling and grammar to improve the overall readability of your essay. Minor errors can detract from the clarity of your argument.
task response
You've discussed both sides of the topic, showing an understanding of the task.
conclusion
Your conclusion succinctly summarizes your view, providing a clear stance on the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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