The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given first graph illustrates the
percentage
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of
households
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, which used various domestic appliances
as
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such as
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washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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from 1920 to 2019. The second graph presents how many hours of domestic chores
as
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such as
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washing clothes, preparing clothes and meals
was
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were
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done by each household during the years shown.
Overall
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, it can be observed, that the
percentage
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of
households
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with refrigerators and
vacuum
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cleaners increased dramatically
while
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households
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with washing machines went up gradually during the century. The
quantity
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number
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of hours doing housework in each household decreased significantly between 1920 and 2019.
According to
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the given data, the
percentage
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of household ownership of washing
machine
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machines
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and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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rose noticeably to 70%,
while
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the
percentage
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of refrigerator owners surged to 90% during the first 40 years. The number
refrigerator
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of refrigerator
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owners continued to
grew
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grow
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and reached
the
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a
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peak in 1960, which was steady until 2019. The
percentage
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of
vacuum
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cleaner ownership went up slowly after
the
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apply
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1960 year and culminated at 100% of
households
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in 2000,
while
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washing machine ownership fluctuated after the
respectively
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respective
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period and experienced small growth at more
70
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than 70
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% in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, vacuum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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