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In the future all cars ,buses and trucks will be driver less.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driver less vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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The automobiles we know now will be so different in the future,
such
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, buses and trucks without
drivers
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 and inside the
cars
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 will be only passengers, no more
drivers
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. I really believe that the future without
drivers
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 sounds good. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss why I believe that the advantages are over the disadvantages. On the one hand, now in our days a lot of
accidents
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 are
comited
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committed
 by
drivers
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,
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 as drunk
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, tired
drivers
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 and
also
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 people who do not pay enough
atention
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attention
 on the streets. The most common reason I believe is the alcohol
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 driving, so having a car
who
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that
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 does not need a driver,
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 kind of tragedy will not happen again. Having a car without
driver
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a driver
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,
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 will be much better,
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, when the
cars
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 are
stucked
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stuck
 in traffic, a robot will have more patience than a human, and
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 by driving themselves, the problems
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 tired
drivers
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 will disappear.
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, without a proper driver, no one will be able to prevent any errors
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,or some sensors, in
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 case maybe
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 will be still a problem, but is just about time and
about
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how they will improve those
cars
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 and how they will prevent any errors.
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,
less
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fewer
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accidents
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 will happen
travelling
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when travelling
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 with
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 type of
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cars
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car
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 and of course, I would like to believe that even the
accidents
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 will not be every day and
fatals
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fatal
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.
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, travelling in
cars
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 without
drivers
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,
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 as buses or trucks, will be safer than
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old-school
cars
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 because the biggest
problem
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problems
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such
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 as alcohol and being tired
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 driving will be inexistent.
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Introduction
Remember to introduce both advantages and disadvantages clearly in the introduction to help guide the reader.
Vocabulary
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas. This could make your arguments more compelling and demonstrate language flexibility.
Paragraph Structure
For a higher score, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences within the paragraph closely support that idea.
Supporting Examples
Consider providing more specific examples to illustrate your points. This helps strengthen your arguments and makes them more tangible to the reader.
Argument Strength
You effectively argued why the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.
Position Clarity
You maintained a clear position throughout the essay.
Essay Structure
Your essay structure was logical and easy to follow.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • human error
  • traffic congestion
  • optimal route planning
  • mobility
  • driving-related professions
  • personal control
  • ethical issues
  • legal issues
  • emergency situations
  • surveillance
  • privacy
  • environmental impact
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