The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the amount of
visitors
to International museums such
as the Louvre
Museum
, London Science Museum
, Vatican Museum
, and Shenzhen Museum
from 1980 to 2015.
It is noticeable that the highest visitors
was Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
the
Change preposition
to the
Louvre
Museum
. By contrast
, the lowest visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
in
the international Change preposition
to
museum
was the London Science Museum
.
In 1980, the number
of visitors
in
the Change preposition
to
Louvre
Museum
was approximately 7.9 million
, which was higher than other museums. In addition
, the number
of visitors
in
the Change preposition
to
Louvre
museum
rose to 9 million
from 1980 to 1995. Moreover
, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
visitors
in
the Change preposition
to
Louvre
Museum
dropped close
to 8 Change preposition
by close
million
in 2000 but the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
visitors
skyrocketed to 9.7 million
over the period
2000, which was higher visitor
than other museums. Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
Furthermore
, the Vatican Museum
significantly increased from 5 million
to 9.5 million
during the period
1980 to 2015.
On the other hand
, the number
of visitors
in
the London Science Change preposition
to
Museum
was steady at 4 million
visitors
during the period
1980 to 1985 and the number
of visitors
fell close to 2 million
. However
, the number
of visitors
in
the Shenzhen Change preposition
to
Museum
decreased from 3.9 million
to 3 million
during the period
from 1980 to 2000 but the number
of visitors
increased to 4 million
in 1.5 decades.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, louvre, museum, number, million, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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