The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the amount of
visitors
to International museums
such
as the
Louvre
Museum
, London Science
Museum
, Vatican
Museum
, and Shenzhen
Museum
from 1980 to 2015. It is noticeable that the highest
visitors
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was
the
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to the
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Louvre
Museum
.
By contrast
, the lowest
visitors
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in
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the international
museum
was the London Science
Museum
. In 1980, the
number
of
visitors
in
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to
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the
Louvre
Museum
was approximately 7.9
million
, which was higher than other museums.
In addition
, the
number
of
visitors
in
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to
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the
Louvre
museum
rose to 9
million
from 1980 to 1995.
Moreover
, the
amount
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of
visitors
in
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to
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the
Louvre
Museum
dropped
close
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by close
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to 8
million
in 2000 but the
amount
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number
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of
visitors
skyrocketed to 9.7
million
over the
period
2000, which was higher
visitor
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visitors
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than other museums.
Furthermore
, the Vatican
Museum
significantly increased from 5
million
to 9.5
million
during the
period
1980 to 2015.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
visitors
in
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the London Science
Museum
was steady at 4
million
visitors
during the
period
1980 to 1985 and the
number
of
visitors
fell close to 2
million
.
However
, the
number
of
visitors
in
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to
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the Shenzhen
Museum
decreased from 3.9
million
to 3
million
during the
period
from 1980 to 2000 but the
number
of
visitors
increased to 4
million
in 1.5 decades.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, louvre, museum, number, million, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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