The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now,  and plans for its development.
The maps
illustrates
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Islip town centre for now and
changes
which are planned for the future.
Overall
, what stands out from the graphs is that it is predicted there will be significant
changes
in facilities,
while
some residential areas will remain unchanged. Looking into detail, regarding the small
changes
, the school which is situated in the south will remain at the original site and will be expanded,
while
the park just below the
shops
will reduce in size.
However
, there will be more
housings
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around the
shops
which will be in the northeast and in the southeast of the centre.
Moreover
, it is expected that the main
road
will be pedestrianised,
while
the
road
near the school will be widened and be
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carriageway.
Likewise
, in the countryside, a new
road
will be constructed which will run from west to east. In terms of big
changes
, the
shops
opposite the main
road
to the north will be demolished to make way for new facilities, including a bus station, a shopping centre and a car park,
whereas
the
shops
opposite the main
road
to the south will remain.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, shops, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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