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The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news form 4 sources from 1995 to 2025

The line graph shows the percentage of people accessing news form 4 sources from 1995 to 2025
#line #percentage #people #news #form #sources
The figure compares the proportion of
people
 in terms of accessing news from 4 different media categories during the period from 1995 to 2025.
Overall
, there was a significant increase in the number of
people
 using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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,
while
 the other categories
shows
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 a downward trend throughout
given
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the given
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 period. It made the internet became the highest media used by
people
 to get the news.
Started
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 from
the
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apply
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0
point
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at
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 1995 and
rose
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 slightly for 5 years, the percentage of
people
 using
internet
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the internet
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 increased
dramaticaly
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dramatically
 until it surpassed the other categories and
become
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 the highest percentage at 55% in 2025.
By contrast
, Tv decreased slightly in around 2005,
then
 increased slightly to around 60%, before gradually
decreased
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decreasing
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 to 50% in 2025.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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