Today, there are more television channels than ever before. Some people think this leads to more choices for television viewers. Others, however, believe this causes the quality of television programmes to decline. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The modern world is evolving to
be
give more comfort for Unnecessary verb
apply
people
, and television space is not
exception. Correct your spelling
no
Time
to time our conditions Change preposition
From time
changed
, and expectations Wrong verb form
change
are becoming
different. Wrong verb form
become
That is
why we have options of
television Change preposition
for
channels
to watch. But people
says
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say
,
Remove the comma
apply
variety
of Correct article usage
a variety
channels
can reduce quality
of programmes. Let's consider what statement we can choose.
First of all, quantity of Add an article
the quality
the
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apply
TV
channels
give
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gives
people
choice
. If we have more Correct article usage
a choice
channels
, therefore
numerous people
will be happy, cause it will cover viewers
demand in taste of Change noun form
viewers'
viewer's
channel
. Correct article usage
the channel
Also
, creators of channels
will try to improve their
Change the word
the
quality
of canvas because of their concurrents
. We all know that concurrency leads to development. Correct your spelling
concurrence
As well as
, different types of themes of channels
attract more people
, because we always need new experience
. Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
For example
, we have children who are enjoyed
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enjoy
by
cartoons, Change preposition
apply
and
adults who like watching action movies, Correct word choice
apply
or
Correct word choice
and
elder
Correct your spelling
older
people
being
absorbed by Verb problem
who are
TV
shows. In addition
, we can notice that more channels
make more workplaces, which solve
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solves
jobless
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the jobless
people
issue.
On the other hand
, we have reducing
Change the form of the verb
reduced
quality
of Add an article
the quality
channels
when we have a lot of it
. Quantity Correct pronoun usage
them
do
not Change the verb form
does
means
Change the verb form
mean
quality
. Furthermore
, we can not ensure that people
hired for work in this
channels
are professionals. Fix the agreement mistake
channel
Consequently
Add a comma
Consequently,
this
will cause producing
programmes which can be harmless for viewers psycho.
Replace the word
production
Overall
, quantity
of Add an article
the quantity
a quantity
channels
provides evolution to TV
world, but Add an article
the TV
also
can downgrade quality
. But, we have to give chances for
creatorsChange preposition
to
,
and try to filter some Remove the comma
apply
progammes
. It will be Correct your spelling
programs
best
solution, in order to cover social needs Change the article
the best
in
Change preposition
on
TV
channels
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