People sleeps less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effects does it have on individuals and on society?

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people nowadays sleep less than in the past. And what causes led it.
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humans
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examine factors responsible for sleep. One of the main reasons for
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, in the past humans worked intensively and longer.
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in a hard time which related tough requirements in wars. The second reason that might be noted, in my view, is devices like ( phones, televisions, and more),and
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all technology
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are all dependent on
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an illness.
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move on effects which I mentioned. So the
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lack of sleep which badly affects
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day
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time. Specifically shortage energy, dopamine et cetera. The second thing
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attitude behavior.
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which
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your memorizing, learning,
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, speech, coordination and controlling
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all
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big disadvantages to your body.
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it
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on break
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the temporary sleeping cycle. In summary, by listing causes and consequences that definitely people in the past used to sleep more than nowadays. We
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technologies and their relation
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our bodies.
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temporary cycle. Notice about your time sleep
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and try to avoid sleeping late.
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