The graph below shows the everage numberof UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030

The graph below shows the everage numberof UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030
The diagram displays the data of
people
who travel to work each day in the UK by car, bus and train from 1970 to 2030. In general, there are more and more
people
use
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public transportation and private vehicles, cars are always the most popular in the period. It is clear from the chart that the figures for commuters driving cars are highest from the beginning, about 5
million
and reach 9
million
at the end
of the period. Compared with 2 kinds of other
transports
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, bus and train, they only have 4
million
and 2
million
and peak at nearly 5
million
. From 1980 to 2000, car-users increased strongly by a
further
2
million
, and
then
rose consistently.
Whereas
people
use buses decreases steadily until the year 2030 and stands at approximately 3
million
.
By comparison
,
people
who intend to use trains experienced
a
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slight growth,
then
remained at 3
million
for a decade, from 2010 to 2020, and suddenly climbed sharply to around 5
million
.
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