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The charts show the information about internet usage in five countries in Europe in 2000.

The charts show the information about internet usage in five countries in Europe in 2000.
The bar chart shows information about the usage of the
Internet
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 in five European countries in 2000, namely Spain, France,
Sweden
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, Germany, and the
UK
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. The bar chart was measured in percentages. Meanwhile, the pie chart shows the average expenditure for shopping using the
Internet
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 per person, which was measured in
euros
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.
Overall
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,
Sweden
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 had the highest percentage of users, and the
UK
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 had the highest average spending on the
Internet
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. Looking at the bar charts,
Sweden
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 had the highest proportion of
internet
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 users, with over a third of the total population, followed by the
UK
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 (20%), Germany, and France by 15% and 10%, respectively. Meanwhile, Spain had the lowest percentage, only 5%. Turning to the pie charts, the lowest spending on the
Internet
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 was
Spain
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in Spain
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, at only 10
euros
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. Germany spent 46
euros
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, and France spent 57
euros
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.
Next,
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Sweden
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 and the
UK
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 spent 76
euros
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 and 87
euros
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, sweden, uk, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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