the most important aim of the science should be to improve peoples lives.to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Most
of
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people
say that the crucial objective of
science
is to enhance
public's
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lives. I totally agree with
this
statement as
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the
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science
helps to improve the quality of life
as well as
the survival of
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the
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humans. The main reason why I agree with
this
statement is that the
inovative
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innovative
ideas of
science
help to upgrade
day to day
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activitier
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activities
and it
induce
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the
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quality of life.
For example
, in ancient
time
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,
people
could not travel to nearby countries since there was no
accesibility
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accessibility
to travel.
However
,after the invention of aeroplanes, it is easier to visit globally beyond the limits.
As a result
, most of the
people
can get jobs from myriad countries.
In addition
,
science
plays a vital role in fighting against various
dangeros
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dangerous
dangers
infectious diseases via inventing vaccines and producing
most
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sophisticated
machineries
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to detect diseases at its initial stage.
For instance
,
vast
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number of
people
died in 2020 when the
covid-la
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COVID-19
pandemic hit the world. fortunately, more deaths were prevented after the invention of
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vaccines.
conequently
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consequently
,
science
helps to the survival of the humans. In conclusion, most
of
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the
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people
argue that the important aim of
the
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science
is
improving
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peoples
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lives.I agree with
this
statement as it helps to enhance the standard and survival of
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.
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