The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps
depicts
some changes Change the verb form
depict
occuring
in the Correct your spelling
occurring
town
of Barmouth between 1936 and 2007.
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Overall
, the most striking feature is that the Linking Words
town
of Barmouth became more modern over the given period of time, moving away from a peaceful area to a Use synonyms
lifely
area with more Correct your spelling
lively
entertaiment
options and less open space.
Correct your spelling
entertainment
To begin
with, the amount of trees in the northwest of the Linking Words
town
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was
decreased in the number Unnecessary verb
apply
while
a cycle path in the southwest was converted into a road. Linking Words
Next,
a river in the northeast of the Linking Words
town
was demolished to build a residential area. The government office was pulled down and replaced by a museum. The farmland next to the government office was transformed into a golf course.
Moving on to the other changes, a bank and a library stood still in the Use synonyms
center
of the Change the spelling
centre
town
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while
a flower shop next to the bank was replaced by a travel agent. A shopping centre was introduced in the centre. Linking Words
Lastly
, a post office remained the same Linking Words
while
a sweet shop and the butchers were removed to erect a supermarket.Linking Words
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