The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps
depicts
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some changes
occuring
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occurring
in the
town
of Barmouth between 1936 and 2007.
Overall
, the most striking feature is that the
town
of Barmouth became more modern over the given period of time, moving away from a peaceful area to a
lifely
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lively
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area with more
entertaiment
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entertainment
options and less open space.
To begin
with, the amount of trees in the northwest of the
town
was
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decreased in the number
while
a cycle path in the southwest was converted into a road.
Next,
a river in the northeast of the
town
was demolished to build a residential area. The government office was pulled down and replaced by a museum. The farmland next to the government office was transformed into a golf course. Moving on to the other changes, a bank and a library stood still in the
center
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of the
town
while
a flower shop next to the bank was replaced by a travel agent. A shopping centre was introduced in the centre.
Lastly
, a post office remained the same
while
a sweet shop and the butchers were removed to erect a supermarket.
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