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As English becomes more widespread as a lingua franca, there is concern that the values and culture of the English-speaking world will displace native values and cultures. To what extend is this fear justified?

There is no doubt that
English
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 is becoming increasingly important as a
language
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 of international communication in the fields of science, trade, entertainment and
as well as
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 others. So, there are many debates about whether
English
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 will alter a country's nature. In my point of view,
this
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 fear is justified but
i
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 believe that
people
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 can manage
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 situation
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in
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 essay, I will outline why
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 think so. It is true that throughout human history,
English
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 is becoming more common ,
fluencial
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influential
, and can be found in almost every country,
while
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 some languages died out, hanged or even replaced. In
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ancient Egypt,
hieroglyph
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hieroglyphs
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 used to be widely written but
it
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they
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 disappeared
along
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a long
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 time ago and only traces are left behind. To some extent,
this
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 process may be inevitable.
However
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, there are many examples in many nations of
people
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 trying to preserve their languages and even revive
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them
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.
For example
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, the Ainu
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 in Japan has been preserved by Japanese Government Policy on social media, propagating the
language
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.
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 actually is one way of identifying a nation.
This
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 can help
people
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 be strong in adversity. Where
this
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 sense of identity and
cohension
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cohesion
 has been lost in Malaysia. Some
people
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 only speak
Malasian
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Malaysian
;
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or
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India
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Indian
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; or Mandarin
instead
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 of having a
langiage
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language
 in common.
This
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 leads to problems
such
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low self-esteem, lack of confidence, and loss of initiative. Retaining the
language
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 of a community often means that other forms of culture exist and remain through songs, literature,
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stories
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 and local traditions.
Therefore
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, it will be passed down through generations.
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, in modern society,
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english
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English
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 only serves to make
human's
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human
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 life becomes more convenient in trade and tourism.
Nevertheless
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, it does not bring anything in terms of tradition, culture and nature. To summarize,
English
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 plays a vital role in globalization to
fulfill
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human's
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human
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 demands. After all, it cannot replace any country's
value
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values
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 and culture because
language
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 displays a nation's identity and tradition. In many countries, governments
also
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 have gradually
becomr
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become
 aware of the importance of the position of
language
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 and try to protect theirs from any threat.

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Supporting Examples
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Grammar
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Argument Depth
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Introduction & Conclusion
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Logical Structure
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Content Depth
Your discussion on the importance of preserving native languages and cultures beside the adoption of English is insightful.
Your opinion

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