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The following charts present data on the marriage and divorce rates in the United States from 1970 to 2000, as well as the marital status of adult Americans in two of those years. Provide an overview of the material by identifying and summarizing its key points, along with any pertinent analogies.

The following charts present data on the marriage and divorce rates in the United States from 1970 to 2000, as well as the marital status of adult Americans in two of those years. Provide an overview of the material by identifying and summarizing its key points, along with any pertinent analogies.
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The bar charts give data on the number of
marriages
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, breakups, and marital conditions of adults in the USA over a period of 30 years, from 1970 to 2000. The units are measured by per cent for the marital matter,
whereas
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 by million for the number of
marriages
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 and divorces. It can be seen that
while
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 the figure for divorces witnessed various variations,
marriages
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 tended to decline significantly.
It is clear that
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 the married status of mature-generation Americans was considerably higher compared with other categories. The total tally of
marriages
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 accounted for about 2.5 in 1970 and remained unchanged in the following year. From 1980 to the end of the cycle, the tendency toward
marriages
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 experienced a steady decrease and reached its lowest level at about 2. Regarding divorces,
this
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 problem fluctuated during the time shown, ranging from roughly 1 to nearly 1.5. In America, mature brackets were inclined towards marriage, with a proportion of approximately 70% for 1970 and about 60% for 2000. The remaining aspects had relatively low rates, not exceeding 20% in two timelines.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words marriages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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