Some people think that children should be raised by all the family members (eg: uncle, aunt and grandparents) rather than only parents. Give your opinion.

Family Plays a significant role in the development of a child . Family is the first teacher of a child . Children are pliable
therefore
it's our responsibility to mould them in the right way so that they can lead a well-settled Lifestyle. One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people who believe that it is better for
a children
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children
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to
raised
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be raised
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by their family members like grandparents ,
aunt
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aunts
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,
uncle
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uncles
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,
cousins
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and cousins
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along with
their parents . There is a range of conflicting arguments related to the assertion but somewhere I vehemently Agree with
notion
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. In the succeeding paragraph,
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intend to delve into the statement
as well as
proffer examples to justify my point of view.
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structure
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coherence
Try to provide clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader through your argument. This will also help in maintaining coherence throughout the essay.
specificity
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grammar and punctuation
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clear stance
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structuring attempt
The introduction hints at a structured approach by mentioning the intention to delve into the statement with examples. Planning to provide examples is a good strategy for developing arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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