Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A group of
individuals
think some
offences
are committed
due to
social issues but others have
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of opinion with
this
. They believe that a
person
's nature decides whether he will indulge in crime in the future or not. From my perspective, crime can be ascribed to an individual's beliefs and learnings
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during his life. Both viewpoints will be examined
further
in
this
essay. On the one hand, an
individuals
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conditions could compel him to
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be involved
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in some illegal activities
such
as burglaries and trafficking.
For instance
, in some poor countries, people cannot
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their basic necessities and get tempted to
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commit
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robbery
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the robbery
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. They
sometime
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loot banks and luxurious goods. There are some
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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which suggest that disadvantaged
individuals
are more tempted to shoplift stuff from a shopping
center
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than a
person
who can afford it.
Hence
, it is an agreeable fact that sometimes lack of money causes poor
individuals
to
do
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commit
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some
offences
.
On the other hand
, a few people opine that an individual's character
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him to
the
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criminal activities.
For instance
, a young
person
who has certain wrong learnings during the course of his life
such
as discriminatory attitudes
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more likely to commit
crime
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a crime
the crime
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. To exemplify, a
person
killed a Muslim family in London just because he
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that all
the
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Muslims
are
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terrorists.
Besides
this
, many unscientific belief systems exist in society which can result in
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abuses and social
offences
. In conclusion, not only poor living conditions can cause an individual to commit crimes but
also
an individual character plays an important role in it. In my opinion, I believe that poor people are mostly
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but generally
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personality plays
big
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a big
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role in
crimnal
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criminal
offences
. Because all these things happen only
due to
one's mental attitude and physical conditions have a minor role to play.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic circumstances
  • poverty
  • lack of education
  • unemployment
  • illegal activities
  • desperation
  • social issues
  • exposure to violence
  • family structures
  • inherent
  • personality traits
  • lack of empathy
  • aggression
  • predilection for risk-taking
  • affluent backgrounds
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