Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
A group of
individuals
think some offences
are committed due to
social issues but others have difference
of opinion with Fix the agreement mistake
differences
this
. They believe that a person
's nature decides whether he will indulge in crime in the future or not. From my perspective, crime can be ascribed to an individual's beliefs and learnings happened
during his life. Both viewpoints will be examined Correct pronoun usage
that happened
further
in this
essay.
On the one hand, an individuals
conditions could compel him to Change noun form
individual's
involve
in some illegal activities Wrong verb form
be involved
such
as burglaries and trafficking. For instance
, in some poor countries, people cannot fulfill
their basic necessities and get tempted to Change the spelling
fulfil
do
Verb problem
commit
robbery
. They Add an article
the robbery
a robbery
sometime
loot banks and luxurious goods. There are some Replace the word
sometimes
evidences
which suggest that disadvantaged Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
individuals
are more tempted to shoplift stuff from a shopping center
than a Change the spelling
centre
person
who can afford it. Hence
, it is an agreeable fact that sometimes lack of money causes poor individuals
to do
some Verb problem
commit
offences
.
On the other hand
, a few people opine that an individual's character lead
him to Change the verb form
leads
the
criminal activities. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, a young person
who has certain wrong learnings during the course of his life such
as discriminatory attitudes are
more likely to commit Correct subject-verb agreement
is
crime
. To exemplify, a Add an article
a crime
the crime
person
killed a Muslim family in London just because he believes
that all Wrong verb form
believed
the
Muslims Correct article usage
apply
are
terrorists. Wrong verb form
were
Besides
this
, many unscientific belief systems exist in society which can result in the
abuses and social Correct article usage
apply
offences
.
In conclusion, not only poor living conditions can cause an individual to commit crimes but also
an individual character plays an important role in it. In my opinion, I believe that poor people are mostly hard working
but generally Add a hyphen
hard-working
human's
personality plays Change noun form
human
big
role in Add an article
a big
crimnal
Correct your spelling
criminal
offences
. Because all these things happen only due to
one's mental attitude and physical conditions have a minor role to play.Submitted by DIANA on
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, clearly stating the topic and your opinion.
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Your essay shows a good understanding of the topic, and you provide a balanced discussion of both views before stating your own opinion.