Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A group of
individuals
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think some
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are committed
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social issues but others have
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of opinion with
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. They believe that a
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's nature decides whether he will indulge in crime in the future or not. From my perspective, crime can be ascribed to an individual's beliefs and learnings
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during his life. Both viewpoints will be examined
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in
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essay. On the one hand, an
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individuals
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conditions could compel him to
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in some illegal activities
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as burglaries and trafficking.
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, in some poor countries, people cannot
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their basic necessities and get tempted to
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robbery
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the robbery
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. They
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loot banks and luxurious goods. There are some
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which suggest that disadvantaged
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are more tempted to shoplift stuff from a shopping
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than a
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who can afford it.
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, it is an agreeable fact that sometimes lack of money causes poor
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to
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some
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.
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, a few people opine that an individual's character
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him to
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criminal activities.
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, a young
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who has certain wrong learnings during the course of his life
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as discriminatory attitudes
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more likely to commit
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a crime
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. To exemplify, a
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killed a Muslim family in London just because he
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that all
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Muslims
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terrorists.
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, many unscientific belief systems exist in society which can result in
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abuses and social
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. In conclusion, not only poor living conditions can cause an individual to commit crimes but
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an individual character plays an important role in it. In my opinion, I believe that poor people are mostly
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but generally
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personality plays
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role in
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criminal
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. Because all these things happen only
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one's mental attitude and physical conditions have a minor role to play.
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Include more specific examples or data to support your points, making your argument stronger and more convincing.
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Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, clearly stating the topic and your opinion.
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Your essay shows a good understanding of the topic, and you provide a balanced discussion of both views before stating your own opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic circumstances
  • poverty
  • lack of education
  • unemployment
  • illegal activities
  • desperation
  • social issues
  • exposure to violence
  • family structures
  • inherent
  • personality traits
  • lack of empathy
  • aggression
  • predilection for risk-taking
  • affluent backgrounds
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