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Public transport is essential but problematic. Describe some of the problems connected to public transport and suggest some solutions.

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Public
transport
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such
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 as
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bus
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buses
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, underground,
tram
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trams
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, etc, are popular in the street, and they bring a
lot
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 of benefits to citizens.
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, there are many problems with people when they use public
transport
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. People may receive dangerous trips, bad services, and delays when they use public
transport
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.
Drivers
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 should be careful,
facilities
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and facilities
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 and schedules improved to provide better service for citizens. On the one hand, it is easy to catch a driver who does not drive carefully
in
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on
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 his
bus
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, and it may lead to dangerous accidents nowadays. Because of
outsourcing
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the outsourcing
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 of
drivers
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, a
lot
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 of public
transport
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companies
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 have to hire new
drivers
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 who are quite young and do not have lots of experience in driving. To handle the problem, public
transport
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companies
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 should provide better training for their
drivers
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 before driving
passengers
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.
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, there are many old facilities in the buses and undergrounds that make
passengers
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 feel bad when using them.
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, there are a
lot
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 of old seats
in
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on
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 the
bus
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 which have
dack
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dark
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colors
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colours
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, and
passengers
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 do not want to use them.
On the other hand
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, public
transport
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companies
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 received many complaints about the delay of schedules for citizens.
Passengers
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 have to face the problem that they can be late
anytime
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on time
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.
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, In my
last
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 exam in the second semester in college, I was late
due to
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 the delayed schedule of the
bus
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. The schedule should be improved by using AI or better technologies to help
passengers
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' lives. In conclusion, There are a
lot
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 of problems when using public
transport
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 like dangerous trips, bad services, and delays.
Therefore
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, Public
Transport
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companies
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 should train the driver,
improve
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and improve
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 the facilities and schedule to provide the best service for their
passengers
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.
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introduction structure
Your introduction provides a clear overview of the topic, but it could be improved by directly addressing the question and outlining the specific problems and solutions you will discuss.
cohesion
Include a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your essay and clearly show the relationship between ideas.
argument clarity and examples
When presenting problems and solutions, ensure each point is clearly stated and directly linked to the topic. Provide specific examples to support your arguments and make them more convincing.
grammar and accuracy
Check for any grammatical errors and typos to enhance the readability and professionalism of your essay.
task relevance
You successfully identified significant issues related to public transport, which is central to task achievement.
conclusion effectiveness
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the essay by reiterating problems and solutions, displaying good task achievement and coherence.
essay structure
Your essay is structurally sound, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which aids in its logical flow and understanding.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions
  • inequality
  • congestion
  • economic feasibility
  • subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • overcrowding
  • commute
  • incentivize
  • service quality
  • reinvest
  • equitable access
  • fiscal responsibility
  • peak hours
  • public subsidy
  • taxpayer burden
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