The graph below presents the employment patterns in the usa between 1930 and 2010

The graph below presents the employment patterns in the usa between 1930 and 2010
The graph shows the patterns of employment in the USA, namely industrial, technical, sales and office, farming, fishing,
and
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foresting, and
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other services, between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, there was an uptrend and downward trend. It is interesting to note that at the beginning of the
period
, the farming, fishing, and foresting sectors had the highest percentage,
while
at the end
of the
period
, it had turned to the lowest proportion. Looking at the beginning
period
, in the 1930s,
the
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farming, fishing and foresting accounted for almost 80%, which was the highest among all sectors. Followed by the other services, and
also
sales and office patterns represent the same percentage around 10 per cent. Meanwhile, the Industrial and technical had 0%. Turning to the end of the
period
, in 2010, the industrial sector increased from 0% to almost 40%, which was the highest proportion. Followed by the technical saw an increase to around almost a third. The percentage of sales and office jobs doubled. Meanwhile,
the
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farming, fishing, and foresting suffered a drop
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75% to merely 5%, the other services remained stable at a tenth.
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