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the bar chrt below shows the number of research students studying deifferent subject in 2005

#bar #chrt #research #students #deifferent
The bar chart describes the
amount
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 of research
students
 studying
variety
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 of subjects in 2005 based on gender.
Overall
, the chart illustrates the number of male research
students
 exceeded the
femalesin
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females in
females
 almost all subjects. Generally, The amount of Male research
students
 outnumber the female
students
 counterparts in mathematics, programming, engineering and psychology.
Whereas
, In linguistics
females
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students
 are higher in numbers. surprisingly The amount of
students
 is equal
in
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 both genders in natural sciences. In both engineering and programming male
student
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students
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 are almost as twice as many female
students
,
While
, in mathematics male
students
 are more than three times, In psychology, the number of male
students
 is 200 and the number of females is a little short of 200.
lastly
, for
linguistics
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linguistics,
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 female
students
 are slightly over 100
students
 and male
student
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students
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 are relatively 80.
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