The media has become too influential in peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The communication sources are widely affecting
lives
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the lives
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of
masses
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the masses
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to a greater extent. Some individuals hold a negative opinion
for
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of
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such
development. From my perspective, it is true and the reasons will be examined
further
in
this
essay.
To begin
with, a majority of media outlets are notably spreading some sort of political
agendas
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agenda
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to get funding from political parties. They report
news
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the news
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with partial facts to favour a political side. When
people
watch
such
content in the news they get influenced by
this
and vote for that party in the elections.
For instance
, some investigational facts are concealed by the reporters which are related to corruption cases against some popular leaders and only favourable news is shown which is usually presented to attract public attention towards them to gain
reputation
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a reputation
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among
people
.
Furthermore
, social media
also
affect
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personal choices. Some
people
buy products from the internet because these are promoted by
the
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apply
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famous
people
. To exemplify, some actors promote food supplements to lose weight and
people
make
decision
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decisions
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after watching
such
motivational advertisements and do not consult their doctor before using them.
This
,
however
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is a detrimental attitude towards their health and sometimes it even causes adverse effects. Ergo, it should be certainly avoided. In conclusion, media can create any kind of impression on its viewer's minds based on the content it creates. It has sometimes affected
personal
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the personal
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and political choices of individuals and could even act as an instrument for
businesses
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business
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promotion.
Overall
, its influence has been used in a negative manner to generate leverage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influential
  • sensationalism
  • conglomerates
  • biased
  • misinformation
  • exacerbating
  • constant exposure
  • unrealistic standards
  • homogenization
  • critical thinking
  • foster
  • community engagement
  • social change
  • public opinion
  • perceptions
  • corporate interests
  • mental health issues
  • traditional cultural
  • educational sources
  • responsibly
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