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The line graph shows TV news viewing figures over a one-year period. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows TV news viewing figures over a one-year period. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph reveals data about the rate at which individuals watched
news
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 during several time intervals in the given timeframe.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that the busiest hours were 6
pm
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,
while
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 people watched the
news
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 less at 1
pm
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 than the other three.
Furthermore
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, it is evident that viewing
news
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 at 11
pm
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 did not become popular until May. Moving to a more detailed analysis, viewing figures for afternoon stood at 1.2
million
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, until the end of the year it maintained relatively the same rates. Looking at evening's rates, as being the highest, the figures represented some fluctuations within the year, after which reaching above 3
million
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. It can be clearly seen that 6
pm
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 ranked first in both January and December
while
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 keeping its initial dominance. Regarding the night viewers, people were mostly in front of the TV at 9:30
pm
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 at the beginning of the period,
however
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, there was a dramatic decrease in the summer months before increasing slightly to 4.8
million
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. Individuals started to watch TV
news
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 at 11
pm
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 in May. The next months saw a considerable growth in the rates. In terms of these two hours, in August the gap between 9:30
pm
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 and 11
pm
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 widened till September in which there was no difference between the figures. In the
last
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 of the period, they again experienced the same difference, the former went up gradually finishing the year at 3 millions people,
while
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 the latter continued its downward trend and ended at under 1
million
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 individuals, which was the lowest rate among other hours.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words news, pm, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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