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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.

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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.
The table and the pie chart compare the
number
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tourists
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of tourists
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went
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who went
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 to Ashdown
Museum
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 and the amount of their satisfaction before and after some renovations.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
museum
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 had become more popular after the repairments. Meanwhile, the
constructions
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had
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increased the amount of satisfaction among
people
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 as well.
To begin
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 with, the year before the renovations, about 74000
people
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 visited the
museum
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while
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this
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number
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 increased after the
constructions
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construction
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 by about 20000
people
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. Before the repairements, about 15 per
cent
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 of visitors were very content with the
sevice
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service
 of
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museum
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the museum
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, just half of the
number
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 of
people
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 who were satisfied. But the year after, the
number
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 of very satisfied
people
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 experienced a rise to 35 per
cent
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overtook
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th
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the
 percentage of satisfied ones by 40. The
amount
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number
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 of dissatisfied individuals saw a sharp decline from 40 to 15 per
cent
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. Just like that, there was an erosion in
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number
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a number
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 of very dissatisfied fellas from 10 to 5 per
cent
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. Simultaneously, in both years, about 5 per
cent
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 of fellows decided not to express their opinions about the
museum
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, as much as very dissatisfied guys in the year after refurbishments.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum, people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor satisfaction
  • survey results
  • exhibits
  • visitor experience
  • marketing strategies
  • dissatisfaction
  • enhancements
  • improvements
  • visitor perception
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