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The pie charts show the sources of electricity in the four countries from 2003 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the sources of electricity in the four countries from 2003 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates how much the sources of electricity were produced in
India
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,
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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, and
Vietnam
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 from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
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, There was a similarity of hydropower as a majority source
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producing electricity in
Morocco
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 and
Sweden
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,
while
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 it was fossil fuel in
India
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 and
Vietnam
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.
Besides
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,
Vietnam
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 and
Morocco
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 were two countries that had no contribution of nuclear power. From 2003 to 2008, the number of hydropower generating electric power in
Morocco
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 and
Sweden
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 was 95% and 52%, respectively compared to 44% in
Vietnam
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 and far less than 14% in
India
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.
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, the figure for fossil fuel in
Vietnam
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 and
India
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 was 56% and 82% in that order, which far exceeds
Morocco
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 and
Sweden
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 at around 4%.
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, there are only 2 countries that use nuclear power in order to produce electricity which
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India
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 and
Sweden
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 at 4% and the highest number at 44%, respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, sweden, morocco, vietnam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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