The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one universitydid after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows thesalaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one universitydid after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows thesalaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart provides information about the destinations of Anthropology
graduates
from a particular university,
while
the table illustrates how much money the anthropologists earn in
work
after 5 years of experience.
Overall
, what stands out from the charts is that the largest proportion of Anthropology
graduates
work
as a full-time employer .
Moreover
,the biggest percentage of
graduates
who
work
for governmental organizations have more income than others. Looking into detail, more than half of all
graduates
have full-time jobs,
while
the share of part-time employers accounts for 15%.The figures for unemployed individuals and those who both
work
and continue their education are 12% and 5% ,respectively and there is no precise data on what 8% of
graduates
are doing.
By contrast
, the equal numbers of them deal with full-time post-graduate studies. When it comes to the income of
graduates
, they are involved in three types of employment, namely, freelance Consultants ,government sector ,and private companies and 5% of freelance employers earn less than 50,000 dollars.Two-fifths of freelance consultants gain more than $100,000,
whereas
30 % of private sector workers have an income of more than a hundred thousand dollars ,
whereas
these numbers are 2 quarters for the state sector employers.
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