IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

The table below gives the information about the co2 production released by give countries that produced the most in 2005 and 2006.

The table below gives the information about the co2 production released by give countries that produced the most in 2005 and 2006.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The above table illustrates the CO2 emissions data in three distinct columns, presenting an
overall
Linking Words
 change , production and release of the relevant gas in terms of per-person measures in the years 2005 to 2006.
According to
Linking Words
 the illustration,
firstly
Linking Words
 there is a noticeable increase in the total production of CO2 with no reduction in any way in every country mentioned. With regards to per capita emissions USA , Russia and Japan are top producers of greenhouse gases
while
Linking Words
 other nations follow behind in that metric.
Secondly
Linking Words
, there is another measure which presents a general shift or increase in the release of gases in which
countries
Use synonyms
 like China and India dominate representing 11% and 8% respectively,between the two years. In conclusion, it can be seen that
while
Linking Words
 each individual has been producing more CO2 in developed
countries
Use synonyms
, the reverse is true for developing
countries
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 at the same time, these
countries
Use synonyms
 are noticing an increased level of emissions.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: