The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.

The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
The graph illustrates
jam's
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jam
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sale
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sales
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for each of
five
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the five
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categories in the
period
from 2009 to 2024. Those categories
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namely
Strawberry
, Raspberry, Grape, Cherry, and Plum.
Overall
, the
sale
of all jams, except Plum, witnessed an upward trend during that
period
. The
Strawberry
Jam
consistenly
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consistently
ranked the highest,
eventhough
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even though
in 2012, it was once surpassed by Raspberry
Jam
, with the difference widening the following year. The
sale
of
strawberry
jam
, in 2009, started at just above 3, followed by a slight
increase
in 2010 and a significant
increase
in 2011 at around 3.5 and above 4.5, respectively.
Then
it climbed sharply between
period
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2012 and 2014.
Regardings Raspberry
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, Its sales began at nearly 3, but
it
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they
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surpassed those of
strawberry
jam
sale
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after climbing sharply in 2012,
then
it was back to a small
increase
, leaving the
strawberry
took
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the lead again. Between
those
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period
, the figure
of
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cherry
jam
sales witnessed a small
increase
, with some fluctuations.
However
, it
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steadily with little variation in the next following years after reaching a low point of less than 2 in 2011 and a high point of more than 3 in 2012. The Grape's figure witnessed a gradual rise throughout those given
period
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, reaching a peak of roughly 5 in 2014.
By contrast
, at the same time, the plum's figure was the only one to gradually decline, reaching a low point of 0 in 2014.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words jam, sale, period, strawberry, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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