The chart below gives information of employed people between 2010 and 2020

The bar graph illustrates the number of people who are employed in the years

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apply

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2010 to 2020.

Overall

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, it is evident that the majority of people preferred working in their homes.

Whereas

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, other groups of people suggest

to be

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being

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self-employed and running their own

business

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businesses

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Apr 19, 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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The chart below gives information of employed people between 2010 and 2020

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