The table below gives the information about the co2 production released by give countries that produced the most in 2005 and 2006.

The table below gives the information about the co2 production released by give countries that produced the most in 2005 and 2006.
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The table provides data about how much carbon dioxide was produced by five countries in the
year
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2005 and 2006.
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, the rate of
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followed upward trends except USA. The highest amount of Co2 was produced by China in 2006,
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Japan held the lowest number in 2005. The USA generated 5879
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of carbon dioxide in 2005, which was reduced by 2% in 2006 and reached 5540
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, in China, the
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rate increased by 11% (initial
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was 5478
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& later
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was 5900
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) Indian people contributed to Co2
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1275
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& 1450
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in 2005 and 2006 respectively, which was raised 8% from its initial stage. Carbon dioxide produced by Russians in 2005 was 1345 and with the increased percentage of 0.6%,the amount reached 1420
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, Japanese people caused 1120
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in 2005, which increased by 1240
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in 2006 (
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