Due to poorer countries experiecing a 'brain drain' they are seeing many professionals, such as doctors and teachers, leaving to work in more developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can be suggested to deal with these situations?

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a quality of living should be higher than
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professionals
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developed
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technology
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of their
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that poorer
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advantage of investment in technology for their
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education and new technology,
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a job that professional
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for a high salary. A lot of
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corruption
will be a solution to deal with a 'brain drain' situation.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Developed countries
  • Underdeveloped nations
  • Economic growth
  • Healthcare services
  • Mortality rates
  • Educational quality
  • Social inequality
  • Human capital
  • Workforce migration
  • Talent retention
  • Policy reform
  • Incentive programs
  • Capacity building
  • Professional opportunities
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