Due to poorer countries experiecing a 'brain drain' they are seeing many professionals, such as doctors and teachers, leaving to work in more developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can be suggested to deal with these situations?

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Brain drain
Developed countries
Underdeveloped nations
Economic growth
Healthcare services
Mortality rates
Educational quality
Social inequality
Human capital
Workforce migration
Talent retention
Policy reform
Incentive programs
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The internet has revolutionized communication and access to information. However, some argue that its negative impacts such as isolation and the spread of misinformation, outweigh its benefits. Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion.

Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

Ambition is a positive quality for people to have in society today. How important is it for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

In many cities an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

In some countries, people encourage their children to get a job or to travel after this and education what are the advantageous and disadvantage?