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The chart compares how many participants in sport sphere from 1985 to 2005. Overall, the types of sports were different amount of players in the time period. While basketball and badminton players remain stable, the players of tennis rose, and the players of rugby fell over time. As the line graph compares, that badminton players were around 51 in 1985 . Then players slightly decreased around 49 in 1990. And players remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding basketball's players, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people. Then slowly decreased in 70 in 1990. Afterward remain constant around 77 between 1995 and 2005. The people in tennis were 150 in 1985. Then gradually increased approximately 175 in 1990. And reaching a peak with around 225 participants in 2005. The rugby's players were around 240 in 1985. Afterward people steadily decline just over 200 in 1995. Then participants rapidly went down in 50 from 1995 to 2005.

The chart compares how many participants in sport sphere from 1985 to 2005. Overall, the types of sports were different amount of players in the time period. While basketball and badminton players remain stable, the players of tennis rose, and the players of rugby fell over time. As the line graph compares, that badminton players were around 51 in 1985 . Then players slightly decreased around 49 in 1990. And players remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding basketball's players, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people. Then slowly decreased in 70 in 1990. Afterward remain constant around 77 between 1995 and 2005. The people in tennis were 150 in 1985. Then gradually increased approximately 175 in 1990. And reaching a peak with around 225 participants in 2005. The rugby's players were around 240 in 1985. Afterward people steadily decline just over 200 in 1995. Then participants rapidly went down in 50 from 1995 to 2005.
The chart compares how many participants in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 sphere from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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, the types of sports were different amount of
players
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 in the time period.
While
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 basketball and badminton
players
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remain
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remained
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 stable, the
players
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 of tennis rose, and the
players
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 of rugby fell over time. As the line graph compares,
that
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the
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 badminton
players
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 were around 51 in 1985 .
Then
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players
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 slightly decreased
around
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to around
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 49 in 1990. And
players
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 remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding
basketball's
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basketball
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players
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, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people.
Then
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 slowly decreased
in
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to
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 70 in 1990.
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Afterwards
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Afterward
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Afterward,
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remain
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remained
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 constant
around
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at around
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 77 between 1995 and 2005. The
people
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number of people
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 in tennis were 150 in 1985.
Then
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 gradually increased
approximately
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to approximately
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 175 in 1990. And
reaching
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reached
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 a peak with around 225 participants in 2005. The
rugby's
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rugby
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players
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 were around 240 in 1985.
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Afterwards
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Afterward
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Afterward,
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 people steadily
decline
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declined
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just
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to just
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 over 200 in 1995.
Then
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 participants rapidly went down
in
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to
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 50 from 1995 to 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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