The chart compares how many participants in sport sphere from 1985 to 2005. Overall, the types of sports were different amount of players in the time period. While basketball and badminton players remain stable, the players of tennis rose, and the players of rugby fell over time. As the line graph compares, that badminton players were around 51 in 1985 . Then players slightly decreased around 49 in 1990. And players remained stable in 50 from 1995 to 2005. Regarding basketball's players, in 1985 there were approximately 75 people. Then slowly decreased in 70 in 1990. Afterward remain constant around 77 between 1995 and 2005. The people in tennis were 150 in 1985. Then gradually increased approximately 175 in 1990. And reaching a peak with around 225 participants in 2005. The rugby's players were around 240 in 1985. Afterward people steadily decline just over 200 in 1995. Then participants rapidly went down in 50 from 1995 to 2005.

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sphere from 1985 to 2005.

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stable, the

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badminton

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49 in 1990. And

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77 between 1995 and 2005. The

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in tennis were 150 in 1985.

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over 200 in 1995.

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