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Band 4.5

You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue into late into the night. Write a letter to your elderly neighbour. In your letter:  explain what will be happening  offer your apologies in advance  invite her to join the celebration

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Dear Mrs. McLean I am writing
this
 letter to request a party will be held on Saturday evening in my yard. Recently, I graduated from university and will
get
Verb problem
be
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 apart
with
Change preposition
from
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 my friends. So we
expecting
Wrong verb form
expect
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 fifty guests to join our farewell party on Saturday evening till late night. There are some cookies I baked with
my
Correct pronoun usage
I
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apologies
Replace the word
apologise
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 for
those disturbance
Change the determiner
that disturbance
those disturbances
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. I gratefully invite you to join us having some barbecue and beverages in the house. Kind regard John
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Grammar & Accuracy
Make sure to proofread your letter for small grammatical errors or typos to enhance clarity.
Detail & Sincerity
Consider offering more detail about the event and the apology to provide a clearer context and show sincerity.
Clarity & Personal Touch
You might want to clarify your statement about 'getting apart with my friends.' It's a nice touch to personalize the letter but ensure the message is clear.
Structure
Your letter is structured in a way that is easy to follow, with a clear introduction, explanation of the event, apology, and invitation.
Tone
The tone of your letter is appropriate and polite, which is suitable for writing to an elderly neighbour.
Inclusivity
Inviting Mrs. McLean to join the celebration is a thoughtful gesture that adds a personal and inclusive touch to your letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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