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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #company
Many people want to work at a large
company
 rather than a small
company
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 statement, and the following examples will be provided in order to support my point of view. Working at a large
company
 has many advantages.There are
high quality
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 office tools that are enough for use and comfortable places for workers.But one of the most
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important benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 is a huge firm has many efficient employees that have
responsibility
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responsible
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 for their own
job
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jobs
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.
For instance
, if you have a duty
in finding
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to find
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 people for some positions. You should only have one duty. Working at a small
company
 has less advantage than a large
company
 because they have a small number of employees. Sometimes you may have many duties in your
job
.
For instance
,
while
 you have to interview applicants, you may have to do more
job
 duties
such
 as orienting new employees and interviewing applicants. In conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that working at a large
company
 has more benefits than a small
company
. So you may not have to work many
job
 duties in a big firm.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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