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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
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The diagram illustrates how
electricity
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 is produced in
electric
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an electric
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 power station.
Overall
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,
this
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 diagram has 7 main steps to produce
electricity
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 starting from the river and finishing
in
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 the national grid.
To begin
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 with, the stream of
water
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 comes to a high level of reservoir and layer on the dam,which controls
water
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.
The next step is
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 the
water
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 going by intake,which opens during the day,and flowing the
water
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 to generate the
electricity
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,
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however
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however,
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 at
night
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night,
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 the
water
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 is pumping. Later, a stream of
water
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 goes to the power station,where generators provide
electricity
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 to the national grid by using power lines. At that stage,
this
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 operation has particularly the same rules,where reversible turbines in the day operate
generator
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a generator
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,but
in
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at
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the
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apply
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night
water
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 is pumping and
further
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 going to high-level reservoirs.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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