Write a letter to a travel agent expressing your dissatisfaction with their facilities due to a problem you had on a holiday.

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am writing
this
letter to address a pressing concern that has arisen regarding the trip
for
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Dubai that I booked for my holiday from your company.The date of booking was 20th
july
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July
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2024 and the booking reference number was D3200-01.
Firstly
, We went to the hotel that was booked as per
itineary
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itinerary
but we did not get
same
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the same
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room that you showed me during booking and
room
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the room
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is too small.
Thus
it
is
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was
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diffcult
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difficult
to manage as I went with my wife and our 2 kids.
Furthermore
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we did not
recieve
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receive
complimentary breakfast as per our travel plan.
Due to
that
reason
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reason,
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we had to go outside to find breakfast and it was very difficult to find vegetarian food in
Middle
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the Middle
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East. In the light of foregoing, our taxi for
city
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the city
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tour was
that
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what
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we discussed. During trip
booking
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booking,
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we asked for
SUV
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an SUV
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to carry our luggage with us, but we received
sedan
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a sedan
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and it was difficult to go for a city tour in that.
Due to
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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problems we did not enjoy a lot from the service that you provided to us. I hope you took
this
matter seriously and gave us the compensation
accordingly
. Thank you so much for
consideration
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your consideration
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. I hope to hear from you regarding
this
matter as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Avi bhadiyadra
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Task Achievement
Try to provide a brief introduction of your issue at the beginning to engage the reader and state your purpose clearly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using a wider variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance your expression and make your letter more engaging.
Task Achievement
Including specific details about how the issues affected your holiday could make your complaint more compelling and justified.
Writing Tone
You've maintained a generally appropriate formal tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.
Logical Structure
Your letter has a clear structure, with distinct paragraphs for each issue, making it easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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