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The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people traveling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009

The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people traveling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009
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The pie charts illustrate five different ways of transporting that people
use
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used
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 for
traveling
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travelling
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 to university in the UK in 2004 and 2009.
It is clear that
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 the popularity of public modes had an upward trend
although
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, own vehicles showed a downward trend. In terms of Buses, it showed a considerable increase from 33% in 2004 to 46% in 2009
moreover
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,
Cars
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the Cars
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 sector contained over
half
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a half
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portion
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a portion
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 of
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the traveling
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traveling
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travelling
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 for people in 2004
however
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, it decreased tremendously to 28% in 2009.
According
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 the statistics ,Bicycle fame climbed moderately from 9% in 2004 to 16% in 2009. Both
number
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the number
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 of Train passengers and Walkers experienced
a
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apply
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minimal growth between these years. In 2004 Trains and walkers
include
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included
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 3% and 4% of transporting respectively
then
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 rose by 1% and 2% in 2009 sequentially.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • methods of transportation
  • travelling
  • university
  • work
  • study
  • dominance
  • increase
  • public transportation
  • usage
  • decrease
  • walking
  • cycling
  • means of transportation
  • reasons
  • changes
  • patterns
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