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Band 7.5

You are having a graduation party next Saturday night. You have invited 50 people to celebrate at an outdoor barbecue evening, which may continue into late into the night. Write a letter to your elderly neighbour. In your letter:  explain what will be happening  offer your apologies in advance  invite her to join the celebration

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am your neighbour and writing to notify you and apologize in advance for an upcoming
party
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 which is organised in my backyard. On upcoming Saturday, I am throwing a graduation
party
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 that will be attended by 50 people. For now, I have planned a barbecue evening but there are high
chances
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 that the
party
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 will continue till midnight as we might play some games or have some other fun activities.
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, I apologize in advance as being an elderly neighbour you prefer silence and peace but that night, there may be some disturbance and it is really hard to control the crowd at the
party
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. We all will try our best to maintain silence.
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, your presence at my
party
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 will be a gift for all of us, if you can attend. I'll try my best to control the crowd and maintain silence during the
party
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. Yours faithfully, Tirth T

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Tone
Make sure to directly address your neighbour with a more personal greeting if known, to enhance the tone of the letter.
Task Response
While your explanation of the event and invitation are clear, providing more details on how you plan to minimize disturbance could strengthen the response.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to improve the flow of information and make your writing more engaging.
Task Achievement
You effectively communicated the purpose of the letter, and offered an apology in advance, which is considerate and appropriate.
Coherence & Cohesion
You structured your letter with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which aids in readability and organization.
Writing Tone
Your polite tone and invitation to the neighbour are thoughtful touches that elevate the letter’s quality.
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