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The bar chart give information about Estimated world illiteracy rates, by regionand by gender, last year

The bar chart give information about Estimated world illiteracy rates, by regionand by gender, last year
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The bar chart illustrates estimations
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illiteracy
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rates
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 of different regions
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 gender.
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, in developed countries most of the population
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is
 able to write and read,
whereas
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 patterns for
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the South
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 Asia region are the
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 addition,it is apparent that in all regions the proportion of women who are illiterate is more than men's.
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 details, for highly-developed nations
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rates
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 are almost 3% which is the lowest.
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In
 Latın American and Caribbean states one-tenth of
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 population cannot read or write ,
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 for females these figures are slightly higher (13% approximately).
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,
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 between
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 percentages of both sexes in East Asia/
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Oceania
 is wider (approximately 8% ,
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% for men and women,respectively). The remaining three regions ,
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, show greater patterns. in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Asia
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rates
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 are around a third.
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 terms of women these numbers are almost two times higher
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 men's.55% female population of South Asian countries is not able to write or read ,which is the highest.
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In
 Sub-Saharan Africa and Arab states
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rates
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 are around 48% and 53% , respectively.
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